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Yug Purush saheb ab jab ek kirdaar mar chuka hai to kyun na uske badle ek naya dumdaar kirdaar story pe entry ho.. Jaise ki Nischal 
Romance Three Girls of My Life
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“waise ye thik hee hua Atharva, ek tarah se… Riya ki maa pahle ki tarah hospital me admit hai aur Riya bhi tujhse pahle ki tarah naraz hai… isliye pahle ki tarah is baar bhi Riya ki maa se milne hospital pahuch jaa aur Riya pahle ki tarah is baar bhi gussa bhool kar tujhse baat karne lagegi…”
“ aur mujhe laga tha ki tujhe Riya tujhe pasand nahi… ”
“tu jis bhi laundi ke peechhe pagal hoga wo mujhe pasand nahi hogi kyunki tujh jaise launde pyar me andhe toh bante hee hai, sath me chutiya aur ban jate hai… ab tu maanega toh hai nahi, fir bhi Ved Sir ki ek salaah hai... jis yuddh aur pyar se shanti aur vikas naa ho, wo yuddh bhi bekar hai aur wo pyaar bhi... "
“waise... Ranjan aaj nahi aaya hai kya…? Prayer me dikha nahi…”
“aaj nahi aaayega… abhi thodi der pahle messege kiya usne. dhabe ki zaameen ka registry karane gaye hai tehsildar ke paas… waise apni team ka naam humlog Garib Gang se badalkar AVR rakhte hai... Atharva, Ved & Ranjan... Ekdum cool lagega... "
"Good idea..." Riya se hospital me milne ka sochte hue maine kaha
"Achha ab bata kya bola Jafar tere kaan me…”
“kuch nahi… bas yahi bol rahaa tha ki Riya ko mujhse alag kar dega…. Vagerah-vagerah”
“tujhko bolna tha ki gand me dum hai toh aaj fir mil bus stand me…”
“J.B. Kujur ki warning bhool gaaya kya…? Last time chhod diya tha… abki baar pond maar legaa…”
“arey, maa chudaye J.B. Kujur aur abki baar jab Vindhya hospital jayega toh Riya ki maa ke liye bhi kuch le jaana… lund jhulaate hue pichhali baar ki tarah khali hath mat pahuch jana…”
“paisa nahi hai bhai…”
“toh ghar walo se maang le… bol dena ki Sanjana ki maa ko dekhne jaa raha hai… toh gharwale khud se paise denge phal, fruit ke liye… fir subject ko palat dena… Sanjana ki jagah Riya aur Sanjana ki maa ki jagah Riya ki maa… Sanjay Gandhi hospital ke bajay Vindhya hospital… aur kya… frame of refrence apply kar lena… jisme object badal jaate hai. aur jo bhi karna ho jaldi karna , kyunki aise mauke pe hee ladkiya jaldi set hoti hai… Jafar, Riya ke peechhe pada hai … ab yadi tu peechhe hata toh bhool ja Riya ko…”
“ tu itna samajhdar kaise ho gaya be... Aur ye Ranjan tujhe ajeeb nahi lag raha kuch dino se…? jaise … koyi bahut bada crime kar diya ho usne aur kuch chhipa raha ho humse… naa saala kuch batata hai, naa ghar taraf aane ki ab jid karta hai... Sanjana ke baare me bhi pichha toh hans kar taal diya.. Par main sure nahi hoon ki wo hans raha tha...”
“dusare ki life me taak-jhak nahi karta apun… yadi wo kuch chhipa raha hai toh, wo uska secret hai aur chhipane ki vazah bhi hogi uske paas… main use force nahi kar sakta aur yadi kisi dusare ya teesare se maloom bhi chal jaye toh main Ranjan se iske bare me discuss nahi karunga… jab tak ki wo mujhe khud na bataye… aur haan, mujhe bhi aisa lagta hai ki wo kuch pareshan hai kuch dino se… shayad dhabe wali zameen ki registry ko lekar…”
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Riya ki maa fir se Vindhya Hospital me admit thi, isliye shayad Riya aaj school nahi aayi thi, Sunayana mam ko toh mahino ho gaye the school aaye hue aur kuch hafto se Sanjana bhi School bunk kar rahi thi… use maine pichhale kayi hafto me sirf ek bar dekha tha, jab wo recess me apna painting submit karne aayi thi.. is tarah Sanskar Valley ki sabse teen jabardast maal aaj absent thi… hum sabke saamne kabhi-kabhar hee aisi situation aati hai, jab koyi apna ya jaan-pahchan wala seriously bimar rahta hai aur hum uske marne ke bare me sochne lagte hai ki kaise wo marega ya maregi… rone wale kaise royenge… uski body ko kaise le jaya jayega… uska post-mortem hoga fir jala ya dafna diya jayega…. Kabhi –kabhar toh sabne ye socha hoga.. Tumne bhi socha hoga.. Jab critical condition me koyi hospital me admit ho. kyunki aisi situation kabhi na kabhi har kisi ke sath hoti hai… ise taala nahi jaa sakta. us waqt ye sochte samay , humari khud imagination humare pure dimag ki maa chod deti hai aur tab hume realize hota ki behanchod ye kya lanthayi ~लंठई kiye jaa rahe hai hum apne life me… jhaant-jhaant jaisi chizo ko lekar apni marwa rahe hai, kabhi apni jhaat jaisi reputation ko lekar toh kabhi jhaat jaise quiz competition ko lekar... jabki end me kuch bhi matter nahi karta… na jameen, na jaydad, na jar, na joru… na pyar… na pariwar… na paisa, na padhayi… us waqt sab kuch lund lagta hai. us waqt sirf ek hee khayal dimag me ghoomta rahta hai aur wo hai…..
Mrityu…. Afterall , Mrityu hee param Satya hai. main is samay Riya aur Sanjana dono ki maa ki maut aur maut ke baad ke rone-dhone waale situation ko imagine kar raha tha….. Actually main ye imagine kar nahi raha tha... Ye toh apne aap mere dimag me aa raha tha....
“kaha kho gaya be... chal… Saxsena bulaya hai… Gupta aur bio wali milke AVR Gang se question puchhenge… bole toh practice…”
“lunch ho gaya... Iski maa kaa... par Ranjan toh aaya hee nahi.. hai..”
“toh Saxsena ko ye thodi maloom hai… chal, jakar batayenge … ekat bahana maarenge… waise tu soch kya raha tha... Bata naa.. Jaroor Riya Rose ke sath waise waale scene soch raha hoga.. Hospital ke bathroom me "
“Saxsena... kaha aane ke liye bola hai…?”
“yahaaaaaa….. 9 point… Apne cabin me aur kaha aur ye teri aankhe gatayan ke jaisi badi-badi kyun ho gayi hai…….”
“chal, Saxsena ke cabin me…”
Saxsena ji ne hume bulaya tha, isliye Ranjan ke bina hee hum dono Saxsena ji ke paas gaye , jaha pahle toh Saxsena khoob bhadka hum par…. Bahut sunaya mujhe.. Kyunki Ranjan waha nahi tha... jis-se bio wali mam ko bahut maza aaya… wo hume gaali khata dekh aise mand-mand muskura rahi thi.. jaise Saxsena hume gariya nahi raha ho balki table ke us paar… bio wali ki chut ko saree ke andar se ungali kar raha ho aur wo bas jhadne hee wali ho… Bio wali ko aise-aise mand-mand muskurate dekh ek baar toh mujhe apne shaq par yakin hone laga aur maine neeche apna pen girakar… table ke neeche jhukkar ye confirm bhi kiya ki kahi sach me toh Saxsena, bio wali ki chut me ungali nahi kar raha….
Pahle Saxsena ji mujhpar bahut bhadke lekin fir jab maine unhe Ranjan ki vyatha batayi toh wo thoda shant hue aur bole ki kal unhe kisi bhi haalat me Ranjan lunch me yaha unke saamne hona chahiye, jispe maine haan me sar hilaya…. Waha Saxsena ke cabin me un dono ke aalawa ek aur shak mauzood aur wo koyi aur nahi balki Bhagwan Das Gupta ji the. Gupta ji, ne mujhse aur Ved se question kiya… jiska ek bhi jawab humse miss nahi hua…
Gupta question puchhta gaya aur hum dono jawab dete gaye… jis-se Gupta ji ka shayad ego hurt ho gaya aur khunnas me unhone hum dono se kaha ki …ab wo hum dono me se jis-se question puchhenge, wahi answer dega… jiske baad unhone dan-dana ke chemistry ke question hum par fire kiye... Par isme bhi wo haar gaya… aise hee thodi hum dono ka pure school me se quiz ke liye direct selection hua tha... Bahut rola tha is field mepar Gupta ji toh aakhirkar Gupta ji hee the... Wo aur jyada khunna gaye aur jab ek question ka jawab Ved ne diya toh isi khunna me hume neecha dikhaane liye aavesh me aakar page number puchh baithe…. Aur kaha ki yadi page number nahi bataya toh abhiyech quiz competition se bedakhal kar dunga.
“arey Gupta ji… aap sirf question puchhiye… ye page number…khud answer dekar bachcho se question puchhna … ye sab aap apni class me puchhiyega… yaha nahi... " Saxsena ji ne shant tarike se saaf -saaf kaha...
Bio wali ki toh is samay aisi halat thi jaise main aur Ved, Gupta ji ke har question ke answer ke sath uski jhaant ka ek baal noch rahe the… andar hee andar tadap uthti wo, humare har answer ke baad… pata nahi bhadwi ko kya… dushmani thi mujhse. Meri khushi us-se bardasht hee nahi hoti thi. Aaj mil jaaye toh........... Anyway, hum dono Saxsena ke cabin me aadhe ghante tak aur rahe, jiske baad hume mukti mili.
Maine us din hee jab Ved ne mujhe Riya Rose ko patane ke tarah -tarah ke ideas diye the, usi din school ke baad Sanjana ki maa ke naam se paise lekar Sanjay Gandhi Hospital ki bajay Vindhya Hospital jaane ka socha aur sath me ye bhi ki Riya ki maa se milne ke baad Sanjana ki maa se bhi mil lunga… us din ki tarah… is hisab se yadi mere gharwalo ne background check kiya aaj ke din ka toh main ekdum clean niklu… unhe yahi maloom chale ki maine Sanjana ki maa se milne ke liye hee unse bike aur paise maange the… par fir maine socha ki kaun sa dono ki maa abhi itna serious hai… ki aaj nahi milunga toh kal mil hee nahi paunga... kal mil lunga aur waise bhi aaj mujhe Prison Break series dekhna tha, bahut dino se pending tha… isliye maine aaj ka plan drop kiya aur ghar aane ke baad mast daba ke khana khaya aur rajayi oodhkar Prison Break dekhne laga…
par mujhe aisa nahi karna chahiye tha, mujhe ye kal par nahi taalna chahiye tha. mujhe usi waqt meri rajayi fek deni chahiye thi ya fir jalakar raakh kar dena chahiye tha… computer fod dena chahiye tha… par kuch bhi karke aaj Riya se milne hospital jaana chahiye tha. bike par nahi toh nange pair sadak par daudte hue… hospital wale entry nahi dete toh jabardasti, ya fir hospital ke peechhe lagi pipe se chadhkar … par mujhe kisi bhi haalat me waha jaana hee chahiye tha… lekin sach toh ye tha ki main nahi gaya… main toh school se aane ke baad mast daba ke khana khaya aur rajayi oodkar, rajayi ke andar aand khajuate hue Prison Break ki 4th episode play kiya….
Der raat tak main isi me busy raha aur dusre din subah 9 baje meri neend khuli… waise toh jis saal board ho us saal kisi ke gharwale itni der tak sone nahi dete , lekin jab gharwalo ko pata ho ki isne already sara syllabus complete karke do baar revision kar liya hai toh fir wo jyada tension nahi lete aur naa hee jyada tension dete hai... isliye subah unless ghar me koyi jaroori kaam na ho toh mujhe kabhi koyi disturb nahi karta….
Toh main mast subah ke 9 baje utha aur uthte hee wo kiya jo sab karte hai… apna mobile dekha… usme 50-55 missed called the, kul milakar Kayi logo ke…. Sabse jyada Ved ke missed call the... ek-do aur mere school ke ladko ka missed call tha, 1 missed call Mira ka bhi tha…. Pakka ye kal raat me mujhe yaad karke mutth mari hogi... Lekin mujhe jara bhi andaza nahi tha ki..... Aage Kya hone wala hai, ya fir ye kahu ki kya ho chuka tha.
“kal raat koyi party-varty thi kya…? Jo aadhi raat se lekar subah tak itna yaad kar rahe the mujhe log… anyway, it feels awesome to be awesome.. Atharva Dev ki baat hee alag hai... Ek din maine mobile silent kya kiya.. Pure rewa riyasat me khal bali mach gayi...… kash in missed call me Riya ki bhi call hoti... Par koyi baat nahi, Riya Rose toh apni territory hai... Aayegi nahi toh jayegi kaha”
Maine mobile ko apni najro ke saamne se door kiya aur bathroom me ghusne ke liye khada hee hua tha ki bahar koyi jor-jor se horn bajane laga….
“kaun hai… subah-subah… apni gaand fade jaa raha hai…”
Maine baahar dekhne ke liye khidki se parda hataya toh Ved bike lekar mujhe mere ghar ke thik saamne dikhayi diya, main khidki kholkar use aawaz dene hee wala tha ki wo bike khada karke andhadhun mere ghar ke main gate ki taraf dauda….
“isko kya hua….. gand maraye, main pahle bathroom me ghusta hu…”
Ved mere ghar ka darwaja khatkhatata, jise main ansuna karta.. Fir wo mera naam leta.. Jise fir main ansuna karta aur aakhir me meri maa hum dono se tang aakar gate kholti aur Ved mere paas aakar mujhe gariyata… standard procedure ye thi… aksar hota bhi yahi tha. lekin Ved ne abhi darwaja khatkhataya bhi nahi tha ki meri maa mere kamre me aa gayi.. Jo abhi-abhi mere room ke bahar wale hall me kisi se phone par baat kar rahi thi. meri maa ke peechhe-peechhe mere papa bhi the, unhe aise dekhkar main thoda aashcharyachakit hua ki kahi inhe mere aur Riya Rose ke chakkar ke baare me toh maloom nahi chal gaya...???
“kal se der raat tak nahi jagunga… mommy, I love you… I love you , popsy…”mammi aur papa ko patane ki koshish karte hue main bola aur tab tak mere room ki khidki koyi bahut jor-jor se khatkhatane laga tha… jispar meri nazar khidki par gayi, maine parda hataya aur dekha toh… Saamne Ved tha….
“chup.. gali-wali mat dena… mammi-papa yahi hai…”khidki kholte hee Maine dheere se Ved ko bola…
“Ranjan kaaaaa.... kisi ne.... gala..... kaat diya Kal raat….”
P. S. Apne comment me reveal naa kare ki kaun mara hai.. Kuch readers shayad abhi pichhe ke update padh rahe hai aadatan last page visit kr hee lete hai.. Toh unke liye ye spiler ho jayega... Apna shock dusare shabdo me vyakt kare...
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कह दो की ये पास्ट का एक सपना है !!!
जो अथर्व सोते हुए इमेजिन कर रहा है, क्योंकि दिन के उसके ख्याल ऐसे ही थे... और कहते हैं जैसे ख्याल हमारे दिलों दिमाग मे चलते हैं वैसे ही स्वप्न हमे आते हैं.!
ऐसे भला कौन साथ छोड़कर जाता है...!!!
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अगर ये ख्वाब नही तो फिर आखिर अथर्व के जाने से कैसे ये सब होने से रुक सकता था... ये जानने के लिए मैं उत्सुक हूँ...
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Yeh ranjan kya sachme mara hai , sapna to nahi hai na.. agla update me patah chalega
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जिस तरह से अथर्व जीवन के परम सत्य यानि मृत्यु के बारे में अपने ख्याल बना रहा था तभी लगा था कि किसी ने किसी के बारे में बुरी खबर मिलने वाली है ।
एक बार ऐसा लगा जैसे रिया की मां अब इस दुनियां में नहीं है पर अंत में जो पढ़ा उससे आश्चर्यचकित और दुःख हुआ ।
बड़े बुजुर्गो की मौत को फिर भी हम बर्दाश्त कर लेते हैं लेकिन बच्चों और जवान लड़कों की असमय मौत बर्दाश्त के बाहर हो जाती है । सबसे ज्यादा दुःख की घडी उनके लिए होती है जो अपनी संतान को इतनी कम उम्र में खो देते हैं ।
काश ! भगवान ने ऐसा नियम बनाया होता कि मां बाप से पहले संतान की मौत न हो ।
उसकी मौत हमें याद दिलाती है उसके साथ बिते हुए घटनाओं की । उसकी मौत हमें याद दिलाती है उसके गमों की । उसकी मौत हमें याद दिलाती है उसके सपनों की जो उसने अपने भविष्य के लिए सोच रखा था । उसकी मौत याद दिलाती है उसके सच्चे दोस्त होने की ।
बहुत ही गमगीन माहौल करने वाला अपडेट था ये ज्ञानी भाई ।
" जिंदगी का सफर , है ये कैसा सफ़र ।
कोई समझा नहीं , कोई जाना नहीं ।। "
एक बार ऐसा लगा जैसे रिया की मां अब इस दुनियां में नहीं है पर अंत में जो पढ़ा उससे आश्चर्यचकित और दुःख हुआ ।
बड़े बुजुर्गो की मौत को फिर भी हम बर्दाश्त कर लेते हैं लेकिन बच्चों और जवान लड़कों की असमय मौत बर्दाश्त के बाहर हो जाती है । सबसे ज्यादा दुःख की घडी उनके लिए होती है जो अपनी संतान को इतनी कम उम्र में खो देते हैं ।
काश ! भगवान ने ऐसा नियम बनाया होता कि मां बाप से पहले संतान की मौत न हो ।
उसकी मौत हमें याद दिलाती है उसके साथ बिते हुए घटनाओं की । उसकी मौत हमें याद दिलाती है उसके गमों की । उसकी मौत हमें याद दिलाती है उसके सपनों की जो उसने अपने भविष्य के लिए सोच रखा था । उसकी मौत याद दिलाती है उसके सच्चे दोस्त होने की ।
बहुत ही गमगीन माहौल करने वाला अपडेट था ये ज्ञानी भाई ।
" जिंदगी का सफर , है ये कैसा सफ़र ।
कोई समझा नहीं , कोई जाना नहीं ।। "
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I also liked the idea of Ved sir Maybe it fixes the mess...
From the point of view of Zafar, he is doing it right but I cannot see Atharva losing even 
One day everyone has to die and I have to agree completely 
Bio Madam does not tolerate our happiness 
and with the rest of the things both are good in studies, so they have so much free time.
I have considered Rajan to be the right guy from the beginning, there is nothing that we are thinking but the last line of the update made me think again Because have not missed any such point to make any argument on this incident or something that I cannot even see before my eyes. Anyway, the fight with which he belongs to the family is very common and because of this something must have happened and a doubt also goes on Zafar and that big-band boy or it just a dream.
Sometimes it seems that my review doesn't even match your story, okay, let's see. I feel very bad now. As always the update was great, You are writing very well, Now let's see what happens next, Till then waiting for the next part of the story.
Thank You...
From the point of view of Zafar, he is doing it right but I cannot see Atharva losing even One day everyone has to die and I have to agree completely Bio Madam does not tolerate our happiness and with the rest of the things both are good in studies, so they have so much free time.I have considered Rajan to be the right guy from the beginning, there is nothing that we are thinking but the last line of the update made me think again Because have not missed any such point to make any argument on this incident or something that I cannot even see before my eyes. Anyway, the fight with which he belongs to the family is very common and because of this something must have happened and a doubt also goes on Zafar and that big-band boy or it just a dream.
Sometimes it seems that my review doesn't even match your story, okay, let's see. I feel very bad now. As always the update was great, You are writing very well, Now let's see what happens next, Till then waiting for the next part of the story.
Thank You...
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Update...9
sunane lga ...par kuch bhi bat to pate ki batai khastour par sucide ke bare me khud ki vichardhara badalne me ese to NASA ka head hona chahiye 
ai sali chimkandi ko bande mataram se insult feel hoti hai mc bhosdi ko bich chaurahe par mandigo se pelvana chahiye vo deep penetration tab ye sapne me bhi vande mataram bolegi ....par ye movind bidu kon hai kya eska mandigo se bhi jyada lamba hai kya ...
sala sigrapatni khi ka
Vaise jo esne name btaya painter ka kya vo shi tha kyo ki Yug Purush bhau ne photo nhi btai na varna me pehchan jata
By the way umda Update tha padkar kal ki trahi dimag kharab nhi hua kyoki esme jafar ka jikra nhi hua
Waiting for next update
... mjak tha 
Update 10
Haramiyo ka future me man nhi lga jo vapas present me aa gye ...karan atharva ko mutash lagna ...par bc ye santi se karne to na ...isse bada tharki open-minded insan ek pure bhramand me nhi milega sala etni rat ko khuli sadak pe muth marne lga or jab atharva ne ne gand me ungali ki to bbc ki news
sunane lga ...par kuch bhi bat to pate ki batai khastour par sucide ke bare me khud ki vichardhara badalne me ese to NASA ka head hona chahiye ai sali chimkandi ko bande mataram se insult feel hoti hai mc bhosdi ko bich chaurahe par mandigo se pelvana chahiye vo deep penetration tab ye sapne me bhi vande mataram bolegi ....par ye movind bidu kon hai kya eska mandigo se bhi jyada lamba hai kya ...To kya future me ye sirf mutth marne hi gye the kya ya fir us lady mantry ko mobin bidu se pelvale ke liye ....vaise ye silky Milky kilky sanjna eske pados me rehti kya ..fir bc esko sanjna se pyar hai to vo jafar kha se baji mar gya ...sala tharki muth marne me hi reh gya hoga or baji us 2 inch land vale jafar ne mar li
sala sigrapatni khi kaLo ji sir mundvaya nhi ki ole girne lage ..vaise apni mummy ko hi uulu bane par lag gya par ese ye pta hona chahiye ki es ullu ko Etna bda gadha esi ne bnaya ...sorry matlab Etna acha ladka bnaya ...bechare ke har jhoot pakde gye feer bhi himmat na hara
Vaise jo esne name btaya painter ka kya vo shi tha kyo ki Yug Purush bhau ne photo nhi btai na varna me pehchan jata
By the way umda Update tha padkar kal ki trahi dimag kharab nhi hua kyoki esme jafar ka jikra nhi hua
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... mjak tha Update 10
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Vaise koi muje btaiyega ki story me age jafar ka jikra hoga ....agar ha to fir uska role kaisa rehega positive ya negative ....ek bat muje samaj me nhi ayi ki kya sanjana Update 9 ke bad bhi jafar ki girlfrienddd rehegi ... please en bato ko leak kar do