My only suggestion would be to not change the story too much. You can make it lengthy by adding more dialogues but certainly not the theme of the story. Keep it your story and not some reader's demand
Adultery My hotwife Riya
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Ya kia har bher wale se h os ko chdvate rho ge as se tu bhter h apne dosto se wife supping ka program bano
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Lagbhag saam ke 7 baj rahe the thodi der me maine dekha tino log lounge me aaye meri najar riya pe gyi aur tikki hi rha gai deep neck blouse saari kya kaamal lag rhi pahle mai jaisa sapne dekhakta tha riya ke liye waise hi lag rahi thi ye improvement dekh bahut kushi hui
Samir: hii sunny kaise ho meet my friend Archit
Mai: fine and you both
Samir: also fine
Fir hamne hand sekh kiya riya ko sab longe riya ko ghur rhe the to fir ham room ki taraf chal diye
Friends aap logo ko batana bhool gya tha Samir 35 saal ka 6.2 feet lamba tha aur Archit 40 saal 6.7 feet lamba tha hata katha tha ache masals the uske
Room taraf jaate hue maine beech me riya ko rok liya fir maine riya se pucha kya hai ye tum bol rhi rahi thi ki kewal Samir se chudwaogi ab ye kaun hai
Riya : maine pucha tha Samir ko usne bola darling mera dost kewal dekhega
Main: thik hai lekin mai chahata hu vo bhi tumko chode to mujhe ye dekh ke maza aa jayega
Riya: pagal ho kya
Main: fir tu tum Samir bhi bhi mat chudawao paise de diye to ghar chalo
Riya: nhi aisa kaise kar sakte hai Samir ne hamari kafi help ki hai mujhe uske sath chudne me maza bhi aa rha hai
Main: lekin jab tum chudi thi Samir se pichali baar to tum mujhse gussa thi
Riya: are main tumko check kar kar rahi thi ki kahi tum mujhako dusare se chudate dekh ke gussa ho rhe ho ya enjoy kar rhe ho
Main: to kya lga tumko
Riya: ab mujhe aisa lagta hai ki tumko acha lagta hai ab tum jisase bologe main usase chuwa lungi ab tum khus ho na ahale mujhe pata nhi tha ki chudai me itana maza aata hai lekin ab mujhe pta chal gya hai chudai se dur rah ke
Main: thik hai fir main jisase bolunga usase tum chudwaogi
Riya: haan tum jaise jisase jaha bologe waha chudwaungi
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Lagbhag saam ke 7 baj rahe the thodi der me maine dekha tino log lounge me aaye meri najar riya pe gyi aur tikki hi rha gai deep neck blouse saari kya kaamal lag rhi pahle mai jaisa sapne dekhakta tha riya ke liye waise hi lag rahi thi ye improvement dekh bahut kushi hui
Samir: hii sunny kaise ho meet my friend Archit
Mai: fine and you both
Samir: also fine
Fir hamne hand sekh kiya riya ko sab longe riya ko ghur rhe the to fir ham room ki taraf chal diye
Friends aap logo ko batana bhool gya tha Samir 35 saal ka 6.2 feet lamba tha aur Archit 40 saal 6.7 feet lamba tha hata katha tha ache masals the uske
Room taraf jaate hue maine beech me riya ko rok liya fir maine riya se pucha kya hai ye tum bol rhi rahi thi ki kewal Samir se chudwaogi ab ye kaun hai
Riya : maine pucha tha Samir ko usne bola darling mera dost kewal dekhega
Main: thik hai lekin mai chahata hu vo bhi tumko chode to mujhe ye dekh ke maza aa jayega
Riya: pagal ho kya
Main: fir tu tum Samir bhi bhi mat chudawao paise de diye to ghar chalo
Riya: nhi aisa kaise kar sakte hai Samir ne hamari kafi help ki hai mujhe uske sath chudne me maza bhi aa rha hai
Main: lekin jab tum chudi thi Samir se pichali baar to tum mujhse gussa thi
Riya: are main tumko check kar kar rahi thi ki kahi tum mujhako dusare se chudate dekh ke gussa ho rhe ho ya enjoy kar rhe ho
Main: to kya lga tumko
Riya: ab mujhe aisa lagta hai ki tumko acha lagta hai ab tum jisase bologe main usase chuwa lungi ab tum khus ho na ahale mujhe pata nhi tha ki chudai me itana maza aata hai lekin ab mujhe pta chal gya hai chudai se dur rah ke
Main: thik hai fir main jisase bolunga usase tum chudwaogi
Riya: haan tum jaise jisase jaha bologe waha chudwaungi
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Mast ekdumUpdate 4
Lagbhag saam ke 7 baj rahe the thodi der me maine dekha tino log lounge me aaye meri najar riya pe gyi aur tikki hi rha gai deep neck blouse saari kya kaamal lag rhi pahle mai jaisa sapne dekhakta tha riya ke liye waise hi lag rahi thi ye improvement dekh bahut kushi hui
Samir: hii sunny kaise ho meet my friend Archit
Mai: fine and you both
Samir: also fine
Fir hamne hand sekh kiya riya ko sab longe riya ko ghur rhe the to fir ham room ki taraf chal diye
Friends aap logo ko batana bhool gya tha Samir 35 saal ka 6.2 feet lamba tha aur Archit 40 saal 6.7 feet lamba tha hata katha tha ache masals the uske
Room taraf jaate hue maine beech me riya ko rok liya fir maine riya se pucha kya hai ye tum bol rhi rahi thi ki kewal Samir se chudwaogi ab ye kaun hai
Riya : maine pucha tha Samir ko usne bola darling mera dost kewal dekhega
Main: thik hai lekin mai chahata hu vo bhi tumko chode to mujhe ye dekh ke maza aa jayega
Riya: pagal ho kya
Main: fir tu tum Samir bhi bhi mat chudawao paise de diye to ghar chalo
Riya: nhi aisa kaise kar sakte hai Samir ne hamari kafi help ki hai mujhe uske sath chudne me maza bhi aa rha hai
Main: lekin jab tum chudi thi Samir se pichali baar to tum mujhse gussa thi
Riya: are main tumko check kar kar rahi thi ki kahi tum mujhako dusare se chudate dekh ke gussa ho rhe ho ya enjoy kar rhe ho
Main: to kya lga tumko
Riya: ab mujhe aisa lagta hai ki tumko acha lagta hai ab tum jisase bologe main usase chuwa lungi ab tum khus ho na ahale mujhe pata nhi tha ki chudai me itana maza aata hai lekin ab mujhe pta chal gya hai chudai se dur rah ke
Main: thik hai fir main jisase bolunga usase tum chudwaogi
Riya: haan tum jaise jisase jaha bologe waha chudwaungi
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any chance of an update or this will end here?Update 4
Lagbhag saam ke 7 baj rahe the thodi der me maine dekha tino log lounge me aaye meri najar riya pe gyi aur tikki hi rha gai deep neck blouse saari kya kaamal lag rhi pahle mai jaisa sapne dekhakta tha riya ke liye waise hi lag rahi thi ye improvement dekh bahut kushi hui
Samir: hii sunny kaise ho meet my friend Archit
Mai: fine and you both
Samir: also fine
Fir hamne hand sekh kiya riya ko sab longe riya ko ghur rhe the to fir ham room ki taraf chal diye
Friends aap logo ko batana bhool gya tha Samir 35 saal ka 6.2 feet lamba tha aur Archit 40 saal 6.7 feet lamba tha hata katha tha ache masals the uske
Room taraf jaate hue maine beech me riya ko rok liya fir maine riya se pucha kya hai ye tum bol rhi rahi thi ki kewal Samir se chudwaogi ab ye kaun hai
Riya : maine pucha tha Samir ko usne bola darling mera dost kewal dekhega
Main: thik hai lekin mai chahata hu vo bhi tumko chode to mujhe ye dekh ke maza aa jayega
Riya: pagal ho kya
Main: fir tu tum Samir bhi bhi mat chudawao paise de diye to ghar chalo
Riya: nhi aisa kaise kar sakte hai Samir ne hamari kafi help ki hai mujhe uske sath chudne me maza bhi aa rha hai
Main: lekin jab tum chudi thi Samir se pichali baar to tum mujhse gussa thi
Riya: are main tumko check kar kar rahi thi ki kahi tum mujhako dusare se chudate dekh ke gussa ho rhe ho ya enjoy kar rhe ho
Main: to kya lga tumko
Riya: ab mujhe aisa lagta hai ki tumko acha lagta hai ab tum jisase bologe main usase chuwa lungi ab tum khus ho na ahale mujhe pata nhi tha ki chudai me itana maza aata hai lekin ab mujhe pta chal gya hai chudai se dur rah ke
Main: thik hai fir main jisase bolunga usase tum chudwaogi
Riya: haan tum jaise jisase jaha bologe waha chudwaungi
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