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Non-Erotic BHOLU JAB RAJA BANA

Naina

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Bholu apne naam k hisab se hi bhola hai... ek sadharn sa insan... ek akela insan.. darna to har insan k swabhao me hota hai... aur koi bhi insan tab hi kamyab hota hai jab wo apne dar se jeet jata hai... wo kehne hai na ki... "DAR k aage Jeet hai" same principle is story me apply ho rha hai... dar se jeetna aasan nhi hota.. saiyam aur khud pe vishwas karna padta hai... Anyway ye to Bholu ka safar hai.. aur wo kis tarah se us safar ko tai karta hai ye story me pta hi lag jayega....
aur rhi baat Poorvi ki... to ye jaruri to nhi hi har ladki ya koi bhi samne aye to usse pyar hi ho jaye... kabhi kbhi kahani me aise hona chahiye jo koi bhi expect na karta ho(for writer)... Dekhte hai Bholu sachcha Raja kaise banta hai...
Actually, mein kisi nirdosh, masoom ke upor anyay hote hue nahi dekh sakti.. ab ye harsh kaise bechare bholu ke upor hukum chala raha hai.. ye baat sahan nahi ho rahi hai. bas isliye thodi jajbati ho gai thi.
 

Swaraj

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Bholu apne naam k hisab se hi bhola hai... ek sadharn sa insan... ek akela insan.. darna to har insan k swabhao me hota hai... aur koi bhi insan tab hi kamyab hota hai jab wo apne dar se jeet jata hai... wo kehne hai na ki... "DAR k aage Jeet hai" same principle is story me apply ho rha hai... dar se jeetna aasan nhi hota.. saiyam aur khud pe vishwas karna padta hai... Anyway ye to Bholu ka safar hai.. aur wo kis tarah se us safar ko tai karta hai ye story me pta hi lag jayega....
aur rhi baat Poorvi ki... to ye jaruri to nhi hi har ladki ya koi bhi samne aye to usse pyar hi ho jaye... kabhi kbhi kahani me aise hona chahiye jo koi bhi expect na karta ho(for writer)... Dekhte hai Bholu sachcha Raja kaise banta hai...
Very well explained bro,
Jaisa ki aapne kaha ki bholu ka safar shuru ho chuka hai,
Is safar me kai utar chadav dekhne ko milenge
Saath rahiye
 
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Swaraj

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Actually, mein kisi nirdosh, masoom ke upor anyay hote hue nahi dekh sakti.. ab ye harsh kaise bechare bholu ke upor hukum chala raha hai.. ye baat sahan nahi ho rahi hai. bas isliye thodi jajbati ho gai thi.
Aapki bhavanaon ko samajh sakta hoon madam.lekin story ki to yahi niti hai,ki aap me emotions lagaye,aankhon me aansu lagaye,dil khush kar de
Suspense se neend poori na ho
Warna kahe ka writer kahe ki story,
Apna valuable suggestions aise hi dete rahen
 

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MIRIK
THAK THAK

"ji aap...."charan singh hairan hote hue bola

"Haan charan singh ji,raja sahab se kehna ZAROORI kaam hai,abhi ke abhi wapas jaana hoga yahan se"arun muskurate hue bola

"Theek hai"hatash swar me bole charan singh.is ghinaune muskurahat ko ache se pehchante hai charan singh.
Raja ji musibat me honge bohut jald

"Soch raha tha ki mai raja ji ke saath chale aaun taaki unko madad mil sake"charan singh bebas hokar bole

"Uski zaroorat nahi hai charan singh ji,bohut jald hum raja ji ko sambhal lenge"arun bola

Bholu ko gaadi me le jaya gaya.charan singh hatash hokar dekhte Rahe

Udhar factory me bhi baat pohunch gayi

"Didi wo naya raja chala gaya"hariya hatash hokar bola

"Hmm koi nayi baat ho to bolo"poorvi boli

"Kya matlab??aapko pata tha ki raja sahab chale jayenge??"hariya ne poochha

"Koi shaque tha kya??"poorvi ne poochha

"Meri samajh me ye nahi a raha hai ki aap raja sahab se itni nafrat kyun karte ho??"hariya se na raha gaya ab

"Aur meri samajh me ye nahi a raha hai ki tum log us aiyyash raja ki itni pairvi kyun kar rahe ho??"poorvi jhunjhalahat ke saath boli

"Acha acha ab gussa thook dijiye,mai ek cup chai le aata hoon"hariya ne baat badalna sahi samjha

"Please le aao,ye raja ji raja ji ne naak me dum kar rakha hai"poorvi sar pakad kar boli

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GOVINDPUR
bholu gaadi se utarkar saamne ja raha tha
Mahal me ghuste hi use ek naujawan baitha hua dikhai diya
Lambi height hai,aur mast body hai uski
Lekin aas paas dekhte hi chaunk gaya.
Jahan wo baitha tha,aas paas ek cheleta aur ek sher baitha hua tha
Darr ke maare bholu ki haalat kharab ho gayi

"Bholu naam hai na tumhara??"apni jagah se bina uthe bola wo naujawan

"H haan"bholu jaise taise bola

"Mera naam harsh hai,pandit ji ka beta hoon,tumhare baare me kaafi suna hai,idhar aao"apne paas bulaya bholu ko

Aur bholu darr ke maare us harsh ke paas chala gaya

"Mujhe baar baar bolne ki aadat nahi hai,na hi baat doharane ki aadat hai,suna hai bina kisi ke izazat ke tum MIRIK gaye the???khair jo hua so hua,ainda apne kamre se nikalne se pehle poochh lena ,samajh me aayi baat??"harsh ne apni aankhon ke kha jaane wali nazron se dekha bholu ko

Bholu ko jaise rona a raha tha,itni zillat.sab aas paas ke log has rahe the muskura rahe the.
Aisi beizzati??

Khair bholu ne apna sar haan me hilaya

"Good,ab ek baat aur.mana ki tum so called raja ho.lekin mai yahan ka asli raja hoon,kyunki mere ishare par yahan ki police,yahan ke aadmi, neta sab isharon par naachte hai.tumhari zaroorat sirf yahan raja ka role karne ki hai samjhe,ye baat bhool na jaana"Harsh bola

Bholu ne fir haan me sar hilaya

"Ab apne room jao,rest lo.fir Shaam ko batata hoon kya karna hai"harsh bola

Bholu ne sar fir hilaya aur apne kamre ki aur chal diya

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DUBAI
ALI bhai aaj bohut khush the.aaj ek badi party rakhi thi

"Aap sab ko maine yahan isliye bulaya kyunki mai chahta tha ki is khushkhabri ko sab ke saath baant logon"ali bhai bole

Sab taaliyan bajane lage

"Dekhiye hum sab chahte hai ki hum jab retirement le to apni zimmedar aise insaan ko den jo har tarike se zimmedari nibhane ke layak ho"ali bhai fir bole

Taaliyan ki awaazein fir aane lagi

"Jab maine apni beti ka nikah ek aise aadmi se kiya tha jisne apni yaaddash kho di,sabhi ne mere faisle ko galat bataya tha,lekin mujhe pata tha ki meri bachhi ko isse acha humsafar nahi mil sakega,aur dekhiye itne saalon baad kitni raunak hai ghar me"ali bhai ke is bayan ke saath taaliyan fir goonjne lagi

"Lekin salim jaise hi hamare parivar ka hissa bana,hum logo ki duniya hi badal gayi,apne soojh boojh ke saath usne karobar ko nayi disha di,isliye aaj mai apne kaam se officially retirement leta hoon"ali bhai bole

Sab chup ho gaye

"Aur aapka naya chairman aur koi nahi salim hoga,please give him a big hand"ali bhai bole aur taliyon ki gadgadahat me salim ka muskurata chehra saamne aaya apni Begum ke saath

Charo aur taaliyan rukne ka naam hi nahi le rahi thi
Nice update
 
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TAKSHAK

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Actually, mein kisi nirdosh, masoom ke upor anyay hote hue nahi dekh sakti.. ab ye harsh kaise bechare bholu ke upor hukum chala raha hai.. ye baat sahan nahi ho rahi hai. bas isliye thodi jajbati ho gai thi.
Aap ka ek innocent ladke se emotionally attached hona jaiyaz... fir bhi ye to apni jagah hai... Ye to WAQT ka khel hai jo garib aur asahay vyakti ko ek Raja bana rha hai... aur jab bhi Waqt apni chaal chalta hai... to wo koyle ko bhi heera bana deta hai... per jo ye bich me padaw padte hai na... ye bade kathin lamhe hote hai.. bahut si mushkile ayegi aur chali jayengi.. aur ager kuch piche chhod jayengi to bas seekh...ab ye to samne wale pe nirbhar karta h ki wo kya seekhta hai... yhi to zindagi hai....
 
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TAKSHAK

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Very well explained bro,
Jaisa ki aapne kaha ki bholu ka safar shuru ho chuka hai,
Is safar me kai utar chadav dekhne ko milenge
Saath rahiye
Shukriya... Dhayanwad... sath bane rhenge... update bhi girate chalo... chale chalo...
 
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"ha ha ha sir Aapne kya daanv khela hai,ye ladka to poora bhonpu nikla"arun haste hue bola

"Itna khush mat ho arun,abhi usse kaam nikalwana hai "pandit ji bole

"Lekin pitaji kya wo sachmuch khajana la payega??mujhe to doubt lagta hai,aur kya wo trishul ka nishan sachmuch tha ??"harsh bol utha

"Yun hi nahi ek ladke ko utha laya main harsh,wahi wo khajana la payega jo sadiyon se laapta hai"pandit ji bole

"Hmm aapne socha hai to kuch samajhkar hi socha hoga,khair ab mai thoda nikalta hoon pitaji"bol harsh chala gaya

"Jo bhi boliye pandit ji us bholu ki haalat dekhne layak thi,hai na"bol arun thahake maarkar hasne laga

Panditji muskurane lage

"Pandit ji mujhe ladka thoda hatkar laga,pata nahi kyun uski aankhon me ajeeb sa tha"Jugnu bola

"Abey Jugnu use darr Bolte hai,harsh sahab ka darr"bol fir hasne laga arun.pandit ji ne bhi saath diya
Wahi Jugnu ko pata nahi kyun ajeeb sa lag raha tha

"Wo factory jo is raja ne fir se naye tarike se chalane ke liye kaha hai,uska kya kare??"arun ne pandit ji se poochha

"Karna kya hai,band kar do ise"bol pandit ji bhi chale gaye apne kamre ki aur

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Bholu ko raat me ek alag se table me khana parosa gaya.
Jabki Panditji ,harsh aur baaki sab alag baith kar khana kha rahe the aur thahaka maarkar has rahe the

Bholu ne khana dekha
3 roti,ek daal aur ek sabzi

Chupchap khane laga wo.khana kha kar jaise hi uthne laga

"Wo raja sahab harsh sahab ka aadesh hai ki aapko apni thali khud lekar jaani hai,aur fir is table ko saaf bhi karna hai"naukar ne sar jhukakar kaha

"Thik hai tum jao,mai kar lunga"bholu bola aur dheere dheere thali uthakar table saaf kar chala gaya

Raat ko bholu ne apni gathri thik kiya aur let gaya
Na chahte hue bhi aankhon se aansu behne lage

"Raja bankar kaisa lag raha hai raja sahab??"

Fir wahi parchai
Bholu ne jhat se apne aansu ponchte hue uth khada hua

"Aap??"

"Haan mai,socha poochh loon ki kaise sab kuch seekha tumne charan singh se,lekin mujhe ye bhi pata tha ki harsh yahan aayega aur tumko zaleel karega"parchai bola

"Aap to antaryami hai"bholu hairani ke saath bola

"Wo to pata nahi par pata hai ki tumhe yahan khajana khojane ke liye bulaya hai,kaam hote hi tumhe khatam kar diya jayega??"parchai bola

"Khajana??kaisa khajana??aur wo mai kaise khojunga??mujhe khud nahi pata hai "bholu bola

"Wo to pata nahi lekin trishul ke nishan ke saath janme ho bhai,to musibat to gale padegi hi"haste hue parchai bola

"To mujhe kya karna chahiye??bhagna chahiye??"bholu bola

"Bhaagne to chahiye raja sahab,lekin pehra sakht hai,fir harsh ke Jaanwar cheete aur sher,bach payenge??"parchai bola

Ek lambi saans chor bed par wapas baith gaya bholu

"Haal chor diya kya???haar maan li??"parchai bola

"Jab aap keh rahe hai ki bhaagne ka koi raasta nahi tab inke haatho meri jaan jayegi lagta hai"bholu bola

"Kyun bhagoge,ye tumhara ghar hai,tumhara shahar,tumhare log aur tumhari bua jiske paas apna bolne wala koi nahi hai"parchai bola

"Mera....lekin wo kaise ??"bholu bola

"Wo samjhana mushkil hai,lekin samajh jaoge,khair tumhari bua.khud ki bua jo choti hi umar me vidhwa bani,unke pitaji yani tumhare dadaji ne uske baad is ghar me le aaye,lekin ye darindo ne unhen ghar se nikal diya aur gaushala me rakh diya,itni thand me ,baarish me ,garmi me wo budhi aurat usi haal me rehti hai"parchai bola

"Lekin ye to galat hai,na insafi hai"bholu bola

"Sahi galat,insaaf nainsafi sab darr ke aage khatam ho jaata hai raja sahab"parchai bola

Bholu ke mann me ek tees si uthi.

"Kya mai unse mil sakta hoon??"bholu bola

"Ped par chad sakte ho raha ji??"parchai bola

Bholu muskuraya
Apne kamre ke khidki khol kar saamne ek ped dikha bholu ko.
Ped chadhne me poora expert tha bholu ped se utarkar dabe paanv pehredaaro se bachkar gaushala me pohunchta hai bholu

Ander bohut gandagi thi aur usi haal me ek choti si charpai thi aur ek boodhi aurat leti hui thi
Thand se bachane ke liye chawal ke bore ko kambal ki tarah odh liya tha

Apna bolne wala sirf is boodhi aurat ke alawa koi nahi tha
Aisi haalat dekhkar aankhon me aansu a gaye bholu ke ,agar ye sachmuch bholu ki bua hui to

"Bua"halke se bol utha bholu

"Koun"ek kamzor si awaz lekar bua bistar se uth gayi

"Mai .....raja ..."itna hi bol paya bholu.gala roondh sa gaya

"Oh mera bachha,tu mujhse kyun rooth gaya beta??kyun tune mujhe kamre se bahar nikalwaya??thode hi din baad mai waise hi mar jaati.aur kamra khali ho jaata"bua boli

"Aisa na boliye bua ji"bholu bol utha

"Tere aadmiyon ne mujhe ye kehkar lekar aaye ki raja ji ka aadesh hai,lekin mai jaanti hoon hamare khoon me itni gandagi nahi hai,bol tune aisa aadesh nahi diya "bholu ka haath pakadkar boli bua

"Nahi bua maine koi aadesh nahi diya tha,aur haan kal tak aapko aapka kamra aapka haq sa mil jayega"bholu bol jhatke ke saath khada hua aur bina bua ko dekhe chala gaya

Peeche awaz sunai di,
"Pata tha mujhe mera baccha mera haq dilwayega,tera bhala ho beta,bhagwan hamesha tere saath rahe,mera aashirvad tere saath hamesha...."

Bholu ke aankhon se,kaan se naak se jaise chingari nikal rahi thi is waqt.gusse se uska darr kab ka choo mantar ho gaya tha

"Chaliye raja ji,ped chadkar wapas jaana hai"parchai bola

"Kyun??ped chadkar kyun??"bholu bola

"Kyonki pehredaaro ka khatra hai"parchai bola

"Ek raja chup chupkar nahi jaata nahi nikalta aap jaiye,mai aata hoon"bholu bola

Parchai jaane laga

"Aur haan, dhanyavad"bholu bola

"Kyun??"parchai ne poochha

"Aap nahi samjhenge ki aapne kitna bada eksaan kiya hai"bholu bola

Parchai kuch nahi bola aur chala gaya

Bholu ek ek kadam lekar purane talab ke paas gaya wahan ek purana sinhansan dikha bholu ko
Wahi wo baith gaya aur kuch hi der me uski aankh lag gayi
 
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