Adultery खूबसूरत डकैत (Completed)

[Chutiyadr]

Hello bro....

So finally I'm here for the reviews....
First of all thank you....to gave us a very beautiful and brilliant story to read...

Ab baat karte hai story ki to....
Sach kahu to mujhe jyada thrilling nahi lagi story....lekin lekin...
Jo suspence or uske saath confusion ka combo aapne rakha hai....that was really awesome....and I like it.....
OR upar se har ak scene ko aapne kaafi achche se describe kiya hai....kai kai jagah mai scene itni achchi tarah defined the ki mujhe laga ki ye sab mere saamne hee ghatit ho raha ho....very good...

Ab baat kare characters ki to .....
Aapne shuruwaat se hee champa or mogra ke bich kaafi confusion rakhi hai....
Jo ki story ki main usp thi.....

Mogra main character hai... lekin uske alawa bhi aapne kai saare characters ko kaafi achchi tarah dikhaya....

Jaise thakur ki wife.....mogra ke father....OR saath mai apna naam bhi....

Waise kuch loop holes bhi the liye kind koi na.....

A very good story....with good writing.....
So keep writing
Entertain us..
Thanks....

OR gayi.....apki koi running story ho to mujhe bataaye... kyoki
Running story par review dene ki baat hee alag hoti hai.....
Thanks again.. .

dhnaywad vikram bhai
abhi koi running story to nahi hai , sabhi purani stories hi hai , running story abhi ruki hui hai jab shuru ho jaye to apko msg kar dunga

 

[prem pujari]

bhai ye story bhi end hogayi
maza bharpur aya par ek baaat samajh nahi aai bhavana aur uske bhai ka kya hua kuch to batate ki aage kya hua

 

[Chutiyadr]

bhai ye story bhi end hogayi
maza bharpur aya par ek baaat samajh nahi aai bhavana aur uske bhai ka kya hua kuch to batate ki aage kya hua

dhanywad prem bhai
usme batane jaisa kuchh tha hi nahi wo to bas yu hi aaye the story me ..
jaise pahle the waise hi rah rahe hai yahi samjh lijiye

 

[Raj_sharma]

Nice story

 

[Chutiyadr]

Nice story

dhanywad raj bhaiya

 

[Chutiyadr]

my new old story

Incest - जिम्मेदारी (कुछ नयी कुछ पुरानी) (Completed)

अध्याय 1 शांत माहोल इतना भयावक की डर ही लग जाये,मानसून की हलकी फुहारे,भीगे हुए लोगो की भीड़ और भीगे हुए नयन,शमसान की सी शांति में कुछ सिसकते बच्चे और बिच में पड़ी हुई दो लाशे,ये वीर ठाकुर और उनकी पत्नी की लाश थी जो एक सडक हादसे का शिकार हो गये थे,वीर ठाकुर पुरे इलाके के सबसे ताकतवर और रुशुखदार...

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[Avi12]

Wah doctor sahab maza a gaya. Mene apki story Randi se pyar padhi thi tabhi apki writing skills se prabhavit ho gaya tha lekin pata nahi kyu apki koi aur story nahi padha mene. Pichle kai dino se me sirf Rocky bhai ki hi story padh raha tha lekin aaj ye story padh kar bhi maza a gaya great job sirji.

 

[Chutiyadr]

Wah doctor sahab maza a gaya. Mene apki story Randi se pyar padhi thi tabhi apki writing skills se prabhavit ho gaya tha lekin pata nahi kyu apki koi aur story nahi padha mene. Pichle kai dino se me sirf Rocky bhai ki hi story padh raha tha lekin aaj ye story padh kar bhi maza a gaya great job sirji.

dhanywad avi bhai

 

[The Immortal]

Hello, Ladies  & Gentleman, 
We are so glad to Introduce Ultimate Story Contest of this year.

Jaise ki aap sabhi Jante Hain is baar Hum USC contest chala rahe hain aur Kuch Din pahle hi Humne Rules & Thread ka announce kar diya tha aur ab Ultimate Story Contest ka Entry Thread air kar diya hai jo 10th, June 2020, 11:59 PM ko close hoga.

Khair ab main point Par Aate Hain Jaisa ki entry thread aired ho chuka hai isliye aap Sabhi readers aur writers se Meri personally request hai ki is contest mein aap Jarur participate kare aur Apni kalpnao ko shabdon ka rasta dikha ke yaha pesh kare ho sakta hai log use pasand kare.
Aur Jo readers nahi likhna chahte wo bakiyo ki story padhke review de sakte hai mujhe bahut Khushi Hogi agar aap is contest mein participate lekar apni story likhenge to.

Ye aap Sabhi Ke liye ek bahut hi sunhara avsar hai isliye Aage Bade aur apni Kalpanao ko shabdon Mein likhkar Duniya Ko dikha De.

Ye ek short story contest hai jisme Minimum 800 words se maximum 6000 words tak allowed hai itne hi words mein apni story complete Karni Hogi, Aur ek hi post mein complete karna hai aur Entry Thread mein post karna hai.
I hope aap mujhe niraash nahi Karenge aur is contest Mein Jarur participate Lenge.

Rules Check Karne k Liye Ye Thread Use karein :- Rules And Queries Thread

Entry Post Karne k Liye Ye thread Use Karein :- Entry Thread
Reviews Post Karne K liye Ye thread Use karein :- Reviews Thread
On Behalf of Admin Team
Regards :- Xforum Staff..

 

[Jasvir]

Nice story