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Aapke hisab se story ki lead lady kise hona chahiye

  • Monica

    Votes: 19 76.0%
  • Rashmi

    Votes: 12 48.0%
  • Sheetal

    Votes: 7 28.0%

  • Total voters
    25
  • Poll closed .

Mbindas

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Bhai the bodyguard ko start karne se pehle jo aapne 2 story ko adhura rakha chhoda hai use complete kar dete to achchha hota,kyoki uska plot bhi bohot hi lajawab hai. Please jo agar aapse un 2 stories ko complete karte bane to kijiye bhai.
 

Mbindas

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Ye update to bohot hi alag tha. Isme to laga ki Rashmi Herbert se haar jayegi par usne marte marte Herbert ko bhi sath me lekar gai. Aur ek jhatka aur ki kubda hi yashodo hai. Yug ke aur us gufa ki murti ka kuch samajh nahi aaya ki Yug aur us rakshas ka beta kaise.
Dekhte hai ki aage kya hota hai.
 
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Swaraj

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Bhai the bodyguard ko start karne se pehle jo aapne 2 story ko adhura rakha chhoda hai use complete kar dete to achchha hota,kyoki uska plot bhi bohot hi lajawab hai. Please jo agar aapse un 2 stories ko complete karte bane to kijiye bhai.
Thanks bro
Lekin wo dono stories ko rewrite karne ja raha hoon
Paschatap restart kiya tha jo kisi ko pasand nahi aaya
Ronnie aur khushi abhi karna nahi chahta.
The bodyguard wahi agent wali feeling degi aapko Saath me innocent romance aur thrill aur suspense bhi
Aap isse nirash nahi honge
 

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THAKKKKK

door ja gira yug ka sharir

"bohut dino baad mere banaye hue is empire ko barbaad kiya tune, mujhe pata tha ki koi aisa aayega jo mujhe takkar de sake. Lekin wo tujh jaisa ek. Mamooli ladka hoga wo pata nahi tha" yoshodo bola

Yug uthne ja raha tha lekin uth nahi pa raha tha
Mask ki poori taqat bhi samay ke Saamne kuch nahi thi

"mere ek ek elite ko tune ya haraya ya fir maar diya apne tarike se" yoshodo bola

DHADD

Ek punch ne yug ko fir door chitak diya aur khoon se lathpath uske sharir ko lagbhag bejan sa bana diya

"tujhe kisi ninja skill se nahi balki apne skill se marunga Taaki poora badla le Saku" yoshodo bola

"waise tujhe maine ek baat nahi batayi. Marne se pehle wo Jaan Le" yoshodo bola

Yug ne yoshodo ki aur dekha. Wo aasman ki aur dekhkar bola
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Flashback

IGO PROVINCE Japan
16th century

Red clan
Master haath jod kar khada tha aur aasman se Ek vishalkay danav use dekh raha tha

"dhanyawad" Master ne haath jod kar kaha

"ye amrit koi nahi piyega tumne wada kiya hai" rakshas bola aur wo amrit ka chota sa kalash master ko saump diya

"ji" master bola

"lekin agar aisa galti se hua to mujhe kisi ko bhejna hoga use khatam karne ke liye jo wo paap karega" rakshas fir bola

"ji" master fir Haan bola

"khush raho, aur is poore vishwa me shanti shthapit karo" rakshas bola aur aasman me gayab ho gaya

Usi Marit kalash ko piya tha yoshodo ne. Aur peete hi amar ho gaya. Lekin poora amrit nahi rakha tha master ne
Kuch amrit bacahakar rakhi thi jo yug ne piya tha
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Yoshodo ne apni kahani khatam ki

"ab dekhta hoon ki tujhe koun bachata hai" yoshodo bola aur tabhi

FASSSS BHAKKKKKKK

khulte hue lava me yug ka aadha sharir tha

"AAAHHHHHHHH" yug cheekh utha.

"Ab apne ant ka dheere dheere wait kar" yoshodo bola

Yug ki aankhen band hone lagi hamesha ke liye.....

"yug utho??" ek awaz aayi mask se

"ab kya hai?? Ab kuch nahi bacha" yug bola

"ye mai Keh rahi hoon jo pehle bhi tumse baat karti aayi thi aur tumne samjha mask baat kar raha hai tumse, mai wahi hoon jo tumhe gufa me le gayi thi, wo scooty wali" ladki boli
Yug ki aankhen band ho chuki thi

"apne taqat ko pehchano yug. Tum hamesha se taqatwar the. Lekin insan ke roop me hone ki wajah se apne taqat se anjan rahe, ye mask ki koi taqat nahi hai. Taqat tumme hi hai apne dimag par zor do aur apne rakshas pravritti ko jagao" ladki boli

Achanak aasman me badal ghane hote gaye aur kaale bhi

Yoshodo ne peeche mudkar dekha yug ka sharir apne aap hawa me tairne laga
Uska aadha sharir chamak raha tha

"AHHH" Yoshodo ne halka sa cheekh liya kyunki uske sharir apne aap kar rahe the
Aur ret ka bankar yug se jud rahe the

"AHH AHHHHHHHHHHH" katna jaari tha aur tezi se yug ka sharir yoshodo se poora ho raha tha

Dheere dheere yoshodo ka sharir aadha reh gaya tha

Yug ka sharir poora laal ho chuka tha.

"ninja skills time stop" yoshodo bola lekin fir bhi yug uski aur aata raha

"yoshodo, mai khud samay hoon" yug bola

Isse pehle yoshodo kuch samajh paata

"sand coffin" yug bola aur yoshodo ka aadha sharir ret ke bhare ek coffin me kaid hokar reh gaya aur usme se khoon nikalne laga

"poora amrit nikalne ke baad teri Jaan jayegi yoshodo" yug bola

Dheere dheere khoon nikalna band ho gaya aur ret ka coffin ret bankar hawa me udd gaya aur chod gaya yoshodo ki haddiyan

Aur usi ke saath yug ka sharir bhi dhamm se dharti me gir gaya

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Sasuka ne pehle hi sabko dark clan ke adde se chalaki se nikal liya tha

Prakash apne team ke saath jab oohuncha usjo laash tak nahi mili. Khoon ka ek dhabba tak nahi tha wahan

Uske liye wahan karne ke liye kuch bacha nahi tha

Asha news anchor ban gayi thi ur prakash se Shaadi kar rahi thi

Shiksha chup chupkar milti thi mickey se, lekin fir poly aur harsh ke razamandi se dono ka rishta aage badh raha hai

Yug ke sharir ka neeche ka hissa poori tarike se thik ho gaya tha
Lekin ab uske sharir se Saara amrit bahar nikal chuka tha.

"monica ka kuch pata chala??" yug ne apne hospital ke bed me lete hue bola

"nahi master" Diana boli

"master" yug has diya, ninja war me kai ninjas shaheed hue the
Dark clan ne surrender kiya jab yoshodo khatam hua aur red clan ko join kiya dark clan ne
Aur zabouza ko waha ka clan leader kiya gaya

Red clan me Rachel ne elaan kar diya ki yug ke thik hone par bas ek saal ke baad wo clan leader ke pad se hat jayegi

white clan ne bhi join kiya red clan ko. Sheetal ko clan leader banaya gaya

Eagle clan ko promise ke mutabik red clan ka sabse close clan bana diya vaya
Mickey uska clan leader bana raha

Snake clan ko revive kiya gaya aur uska lead sasuka ne apne oopar le liya

Yug yoshodo ko khatam karne ke baad Lori ne uska ilaaj kiya aur use thik kiya. Fir use hospital rakha gaya

Yug hospital me admit tha
Prakash, asha, harsh, poly aur shiksha lagatar milne aate the usse

"monica ka pata laga rahe hai. Jitni jaldi ho sake utni waise..." bolte hue diana ruk gayi

"waise??..." yug ne poocha

"yug rashmi ka to tumko pata hi hai" chen is baar bola

"Haan, uski kurbani ki wajah se hi Herbert maara gaya" yug dukhi hokar bola

"lekin kya tumhe pata hai ki rashmi ka ek beta bhi tha??" chen ne poocha

"kya??" chaunk gaya yug

"Haan yug aur rashmi ke bete ke piya tum ho" is baar Rachel aate hue boli

Yug ko yakeen hi nahi ho raha tha

"jab tum Lori madam ko dhoonde sasuka aur chen ke saath gaye the, tab tumhe rashmi ne bachaya tha. Lori madam aakar tumhe bacha liya aur chali gayi. Lekin raat ko tumhari garmi badhti ja rahi thi. Aur use rokne ke liye rashmi ne apna jism de diya tha tumhe, kyunki pata na chale ki rashmi pregnant hai usne red caln join karke mujhe sab kuch bata diya aur wada liya ki uske jeete ji kisi ko na pata chale ye baat"rachel boli

Yug sunn tha uske aankhon se aansu ruk nahi rahe the

"game jald se jald monica ko dhoondna hoga aur hamara agla waris wapas laana hoga yug, tumhare baad red clan ko sambhalega tumhara beta" chen bola

"aur wo jald se jald dhoondna hoga tumhe yug" is baar kaale kapde me wo ladki boli jo scooty me yug se kai baar takrayi thi

"hi, mera Naam aren hai" ladki muskurate hue sabse boli

In sabse door train ke ek compartment me monica ek chote se bachhe ko apne God me liye ja rahi thi
Rashmi ka wada liya tha usne. Apne bete ko in sab khoon kharabe se door le Jaana. Aur ek aam insan banana na ki ek ninja
Wahi karegi wo
Ab se yug aur uske parivar wale uske liye mar chuke hai, ab se wo ek maa hai
Is bachhe ki maa
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KAILASH MANSAROVAR
aakash aur disha khush the aaj unke bete ka namkaran tha

"boliye guruji" aakash ne apne guru se poocha

Guru muskuraye aur us bachhe ke sar par haath rakha
Lekin unki muskurahat gayab ho rahi thi aur dheere dheere darr unke chehre par dikh raha tha

"mahapralay" guruji door jaate hue bola

"ye kya bol rahe hai guruji" disha apne bete ke sar par haath ferte hue boli

"mahavinash" guruji fir bole

Akash ne guruji ko pranam kiya. Guruji shant hue

"beta tumhare bete ke saath ek kundli takra rahi hai. Jo isi ki tarah shaktishali hai wo Jab is kundli se takrayegi tab dono saman shaktiyon se takrakar duniya ka kya haal hoga wo sochte hi sugar utha" guruji bole

"wo shakti koun hai guruji??" aakash ne poocha

"wo shakti bhi tumhare bete ki tarah hi bada hai aur wo ek din tumhare bete se zaroor takrayegi" bol guruji chale gaye

Disha bulati rahi guruji ko lekin guruji ruke nahi

Aakash uthkar khada hua aur apne bete ko god me lekar Waqt Ka intezar karne laga

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(aakash ke baare me janne ke liye padhein AJNABEE)
 
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Anky@123

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Lajawab matlab ajnabe 1 aur ajnabi 2 parallel chal rhi thi ??? Akash ki life kahi aur and yug ki sath hi sath kahi aur
 
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Bahut hi shandar story thi Swaraj bhai..lag rha agle part me yug ke bete aur Akash ke bete ki takkar hogi ....Khair intejar rahegi us story ki but usse pahle mujhe Agent-3 ka wait h ummid karta hu apne kahne ke mutabik ab aap Agent -3 start karenge........ eagerly waiting
 
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Mbindas

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Kamal ki story thi ye bhai. Itne achchhe se puri story ko present kiya aapne. Ye journey bhi yaadgar rahegi. Aur wese bhi aapki new story me milna hota rahega.

Aur rahi pashchatap ki baat to bhai starting me to kuch samajhna mushkil hi hai use aap bas use likhte jaiye dhire-dhire sabhi ko samajh ayegi to zaroor sabhi ko is story me bhi interest aayega. Bas aapse request hai ki aap ye story bhi start kijiye.
 
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